tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8512327745848627452.post2374523089766931696..comments2024-03-24T14:25:25.667+01:00Comments on CARPE DIEM HAIKU KAI: Carpe Diem "Sparkling Stars" #14, Unknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8512327745848627452.post-50920347678241902362014-12-07T22:54:24.805+01:002014-12-07T22:54:24.805+01:00it was really a great haiku ... so ... congrats an...it was really a great haiku ... so ... congrats and i am glad that you're happy with winning this first edition of our Sea Shell Game.<br />Thank you for your kind words.Chèvrefeuillehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00848986700725789154noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8512327745848627452.post-54321466248449933332014-12-07T05:31:52.734+01:002014-12-07T05:31:52.734+01:00Thanks so much, Jen!Thanks so much, Jen!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8512327745848627452.post-51713591029210545342014-12-07T05:30:52.872+01:002014-12-07T05:30:52.872+01:00Thanks, Brud.Thanks, Brud.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8512327745848627452.post-4973324719769836592014-12-07T05:29:51.576+01:002014-12-07T05:29:51.576+01:00Thanks, Lolly!Thanks, Lolly!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8512327745848627452.post-69352061310632891032014-12-07T05:28:27.140+01:002014-12-07T05:28:27.140+01:00Thank you so much, Girl Friday! I appreciate your...Thank you so much, Girl Friday! I appreciate your taking the time to write your thoughts on this.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8512327745848627452.post-36896428575204453002014-12-07T05:25:45.459+01:002014-12-07T05:25:45.459+01:00Thanks, Jules! Have a wonderful vacation.Thanks, Jules! Have a wonderful vacation.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8512327745848627452.post-76724342982028521262014-12-07T05:24:33.024+01:002014-12-07T05:24:33.024+01:00Kristjaan, I am honored that you picked my haiku f...Kristjaan, I am honored that you picked my haiku for this challenge. Thanks so much, and thank you for all the knowledge you impart, and your wonderful prompts.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8512327745848627452.post-51666488017153748162014-12-05T01:59:15.462+01:002014-12-05T01:59:15.462+01:00Congratulations Sara :)Congratulations Sara :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8512327745848627452.post-44058552507159105032014-12-04T22:15:30.383+01:002014-12-04T22:15:30.383+01:00Lovely haiku -- congrats Sara Lovely haiku -- congrats Sara brudberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12563403553536472377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8512327745848627452.post-4994177783251246582014-12-04T16:28:59.203+01:002014-12-04T16:28:59.203+01:00Fun. Congrats to Sara :)Fun. Congrats to Sara :)Lollyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16526692343815904632noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8512327745848627452.post-47681281584111641472014-12-04T12:52:18.180+01:002014-12-04T12:52:18.180+01:00Ocean tide ebbs
Sand glistens with sea treasures
L...Ocean tide ebbs<br />Sand glistens with sea treasures<br />Lucent blue beach glass<br /><br /><br />You have chosen well, KP.<br /><br />This gem has so much poetic diction stored inside its 61 letters.<br />The choice of 'glisten' over similar words like 'sparkle', 'shine', 'glimmer', 'gleam' , is brilliant. Pardon the pun.:-)<br /><br />'glisten' is what sweat does on the skin, and that is just exactly what is needed here. You can see the little wavy lines of dried up salt, with that bit of dampnes on the hard-trodden sand left by the retreating water.<br /><br />Then come the good things: the treasures that are left behind. I want to pick them up, inspect them, and maybe take some home for my collections.<br /><br />'ebb and flood'. We all know the sea does ebb and flood, but Sara has put us in the picture in the fewest letters, the simplest words. I can think of clumsy ways I might have opened the concept of this haiku. But none would have been so concise and sparing as her line. We are there, with her on the walk. I presume one has to actually see this with real eyes, rather than Wordsworth's 'inward eye'.<br /><br />Then there is the delicious series of the letter -s- in line 2, giving us a background of sound.And to conclude, the colour and transparency of glass. Not simply translucent but lucent, 'giving off light'. We don't know if it is the silicon of the sand itself, or washed up shards of bottles, leading us to the ocean going vessels that careless threw their unwanted items overboard, or possibly the 'yo ho ho and a bottle of rum' from ancient travellers.<br /><br />'lucent blue', with their letter -l- and their assonance [=the repetition of vowel sounds in nearby words] provide another little nugget of pleasure.<br /><br />And those are onlythe aspects that I managed to put into words.<br /><br /><br /><br />joanna ukhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18384148993585680645noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8512327745848627452.post-1734023980218393252014-12-04T12:37:25.612+01:002014-12-04T12:37:25.612+01:00All the best Sara!
I am indeed looking for a vaca...All the best Sara! <br />I am indeed looking for a vacation soon... to walk in the footsteps of hermit crabs...*sigh*Juleshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00571987715911379165noreply@blogger.com