Sunday, July 21, 2019

Carpe Diem #1707 cooling on the porch (hashi-i), classical haiku

Dear Haijin, visitors and travelers,

Welcome at a new "regular" episode in our wonderful Summer Love month here at our Haiku Kai. Today I love to challenge you to create a (or more) haiku following the classical rules as you can read in our CDHK Lecture 1 (above in the menu). For this challenge I have chosen a classical kigo, extracted from the Shiki Saijiki, "cooling on the porch (hashi-i)", it's part of the section "summer", subsection "humanity".

Cooling On The Porch (Hashi-i)

Today's classical kigo to work with is very clear I think. Isn't it a joy to cool down on the porch with a nice beer or glass of wine after a warm summer day? I for sure would enjoy that, but I don't have a porch to cool down. After a warm (or hot) summer day I enjoy the coolness of my backyard. Sometimes completely naked, but not always of course. Our backyard gives us a lot of privacy, so resting there in the nude isn't a problem.

in the mansion's backyard
the breeze cherishes my naked body
ah! that sweet coolness ...

© Chèvrefeuille

Looks somewhat artificial, because I had some trouble to create this haiku in the classical way, as is the goal for today's challenge. Well ... you all know that I am not a big fan of the classical way of writing haiku. So to me this is a real "ordeal", but if I asked it of you I have to do it myself too.

If I would "redo" this one into my way of writing haiku than it would be:

in the backyard
the evening breeze

© Chèvrefeuille (experimental haiku)

Well ... I hope you all have enjoyed your weekend ... This episode is NOW OPEN for your submissions and will remain open until July 28th at noon (CEST). I will try to publish our new episode later on.

1 comment:

  1. This brought memories of our porch growing up! So I couldn't stop at 3 lines but had to write tanka :)