Dear Haijin, visitors and travelers,
Welcome at a new episode in our Tan Renga Challenge month. Today I have a beauty by Yozakura (1640-1716), a not so well known haiku poet and a contemporary of Basho. Must be awesome to have met Basho I would say. Yozakura's haiku are wearing his own signature, but you also can sense the hand of the master (Basho).
feeling alone
in the woods around Edo
just the autumn wind
© Yozakura (1640-1716)
just the autumn wind
© Yozakura (1640-1716)
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| View on Edo (Woodblock print) |
A nice haiku to start with I think ... I have tried to give it a chance to create the second stanza towards this haiku by Yozakura.
feeling alone
in the woods around Edo
just the autumn wind © Yozakura (1640-1716)
in the woods around Edo
just the autumn wind © Yozakura (1640-1716)
through the bare branches
I see the dragon-kites © Chèvrefeuille
I like this second stanza, it makes the loneliness in the first stanza stronger, but on the other hand maybe it makes that loneliness less stronger, because he sees the dragon-kites ... what would you think?
This episode is NOW OPEN for your submissions and will remain open until May 19th at noon (CET). I have published our new "hokku" already on our Twitter account.
!! I have created a new part of our Carpe Diem Haiku Kai family about Tan Renga, I have called it "Carpe Diem's Chained Together" it's online already, but under construction of course.
The dragonkites intendifies the loneliness because they are separated by the trees, and they are many, while the one in the woods is just one. We do not get to "see" who are holding the dragon kites, and this also intensifies the feeling of loneliness.
ReplyDeleteSeeing the kites from a distance but still visible tends to make the isolation more pronounced.
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ReplyDeletefeeling alone
in the woods around Edo
just the autumn wind Yozakura
composing a poem
I am in the company of the master Joyce Lorenson
This loneliness seems temporary one, since next moment we up to discover somebody else holding the all these dragons..also with wind they can easily stuck in the bare branches...lots of possibilities, the whole story plot...very creative.
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