Saturday, October 4, 2014

Carpe Diem Special #110, Shiba Sonome 1 "as night deepens"


Dear Haijin, visitors and travelers,

Last month our CD Specials were all quotes by Saint Francis of Assisi and this month we will go back to our regular way of CD Specials ... This month we have another wonderful featured classical haiku-poetess. She was a disciple of Basho and writes her haiku in almost the same style as Basho did. Her name Shiba Sonome (1664-1726) and this is the first haiku which I love to share here from her:

mushi no ne ya yo fukete shizumu ishi no naka

the insects' chirp
as night deepens
sinks into the stones

© Shiba Sonome

What a beauty don't you think so? It's a very fragile scene she describes here with this haiku and it so much in touch with a haiku by Basho in almost the same way. That haiku I love to share here too:

shizukasa ya iwa ni shimi-iru semi no koe

lonely silence,
a single cicada's cry
sinking into stone

© Basho

These haiku are very similar and they show how Shiba Sonome was influenced by Basho's way of composing haiku. Let me look at a haiku composed by Yozakura, whom also was a disciple of Basho and maybe he knew Sonome too.
This was the first Carpe Diem Special Logo (2012)
semino uta mangetsuno hikarino nakade shimetta kirameku koishi

shimmering pebble
wetted in the light of the full moon -
a cicada's song

© Yozakura

Well these are all wonderful, but as you all know ... the goal of the CD Specials is to write/compose an all new haiku in the same sphere, tone and spirit as the one given. So the goal of this episode is to write an all new haiku inspired on the haiku by Sonome ... and try to catch her spirit in it. 

Here is my attempt to compose a haiku in the spirit of Sonome:

hot summernight
cooling down in the old pond
the sound of mosquitos

© Chèvrefeuille

Hm ... I am not 100% satisfied with this one, but I have no idea how to catch the same feeling as in the haiku by Sonome ... or ... yeah I think this haiku is in touch with the spirit of Sonome.

This episode is open for your submissions tonight at 7.00 PM (CET) and will remain open until October 7th at noon (CET). I will publish our new episode, Blues (January 2013), later on today. For now ... have fun!


3 comments:

  1. I think your haiku has real imagery and atmosphere - very much, but the mosquitos sound too present - too real!

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  2. I am so sorry to bother.. but my link is wrong on this one... http://brudberg.wordpress.com/2014/10/05/carpe-diem-haiku-shiba-sonomes-night-deepens/ is the correct one.

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