Tuesday, September 29, 2015

Carpe Diem Tokubetsudesu #63 Troiku (reprise)


Dear Haijin, visitors and travelers,

To celebrate that CDHK has a new part on Troiku I love to challenge you all to write (again) a troiku. This time however with a small twist ... you have to use the haiku which I will give you in this episode.
By the way I am busy with creating a new feature here at CDHK in which we will, on a bi-weekly base, have two different creative ways of writing haiku. That feature is about Troiku and Fibo-ku, two creative ways to write haiku which I invented.

Ok ... back to this Tokubetsudesu episode. I have a wonderful haiku by Matsuo Basho (1644-1694), one of the "big-five" haiku poets (Basho, Issa, Chiyo-Ni, Buson and Shiki), to start your Troiku with. In short you have to write three new haiku using the three separated lines of the given haiku as the first line. To read more about Troiku, please see the menu above.

Credits: A Troika the base of the Troiku

The haiku which you have to use ("the sleigh") is a haiku by Basho in a translation by Jane Reichhold.

Here is the haiku ("the sleigh") to use to create the three new haiku ("the horses"):

butterflies and birds
restlessly they rise up
a cloud of flowers

© Basho (Tr. Jane Reichhold)

This is what Jane tells us about this haiku by Basho written in spring 1684: This verse is ambiguous enough that the reader does not know if the butterflies and birds look like a cloud of flowers or if they fly up into a cloud of blossoms.

This is the "blue-print" of the troiku:

(sleigh):

butterflies and birds
restlessly they rise up
a cloud of flowers

(horse 1):

+ starts with: butterflies and birds

(horse 2):

+ starts with: restlessly they rise up

(horse 3):

+ starts with: a cloud of flowers

I will of course create a troiku from this haiku by Basho myself and I have already the "third horse":

a cloud of flowers
on the shoulders of the wind
they rise to heaven

© Chèvrefeuille

Isn't it awesome to create a troiku? I even created a weblog especially for this new form (you can find the link at the left of our home-page) and I will create a new CDHK special feature for this creative way of writing haiku.

Well ... good luck .... have fun!

This episode is open for your submissions tonight at 7.00 PM (CET) and will remain open until October 2nd at noon (CET). Have fun!

1 comment:

  1. It's still October 2nd here! Mine is up at: https://purplepeninportland.wordpress.com/2015/10/03/butterflies-and-birds/

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