Carpe Diem's "Ask Jane ..." #5, a question by Carol

Dear Haijin, visitors and travelers,

Jane asked me to publish this new article for Ask Jane. Jane is responding spontaneous on a comment by Carol, which Carol shared in our last Ask Jane episode. Here is our new episode of Carpe Diem's "Ask Jane ..."

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In reading the comments to the last Ask Jane question I found this by Carol and felt she needed some help. So here is another letter. Use it if you wish.  

\o/ Jane

Question: I am trying to do some haiku without the 17 syllable rule. I assume you just “follow your heart” and forget the counting. Carol in Creative Harbor.

Dear Carol,

I get a wisp of indecision about counting syllables in haiku in your comment on Carpe Diem and wanted to try to put your mind at rest.

If you were Japanese and writing your haiku in Japanese it would be proper for you to use 17 kana (not syllables!). These are the sound units in spoken Japanese. Since your haiku are written in English you cannot use this Japanese rule because our syllables are about 1/3 longer than the Japanese sound units.

The Japanese who brought the knowledge of haiku to English-readers made this mistake of calling a sound unit a syllable and saying we should use 17 of them. The mistake persisted until English scholars figured out the error. And the error persists.

So if you are writing your English haiku with 17 syllables they contain about 1/3 too much information / words / ideas. The newest English rule to keep the haiku shape is to suggest the author use “short, long, short” lines in a relationship that suggests the Japanese haiku form. Many are using this rule and I find it results in haiku that can be accurately translated into Japanese sound units or kana. The 17-syllable haiku come out too long.

So we have more freedom in shaping our haiku than we thought.

You ask if I ignore counting syllables. No. If one of my lines looks too long I will count the syllables to find a way to shorten it. Sometimes a haiku will use up 17 syllables, but my rule is to NEVER PAD OUT THE LINE to make it fit. If it happens naturally, without padding or adding extra words, I occasionally will leave it as I received it. At some time then, I may rewrite it to shorten the haiku.

I hope this helps you and gives you the freedom to more easily accept your own ideas!

\o/ Jane

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Carpe Diem''s Tan Renga Challenge Month #XIX, Carol's ''tickling ivories''

Dear Haijin, visitors and travelers,

Today our Tan Renga ''to complete'' is started by Carol of ''a creative harbor'' and it was her response on the prompt ''Ivory'' last month. It's a nice haiku and it caught me as I read it. Up to you is the challenge to complete this Tan Renga by composing the second stanza of Carol's starting verse:

tickling ivories
scintillating music sound
filling the inner soul

(c) Carol

Credits: Windchime

And this is my attempt to complete this Tan Renga with my second stanza:

tickling ivories
scintillating music sound
filling the inner soul                                               (Carol)

walking through the neighborhood
the fragile sound of a windchime                           (Chèvrefeuille)

Ah! That sweet, fragile and soothing sound of a windchime ... the song of angels ...

Now it's up to you to complete this Tan Renga with a second stanza. This episode of our Tan Renga Challenge Month will stay on until November 21th 11.59 AM (CET). Have fun, be inspired and share your completed Tan Renga with our Haiku Kai. !! Submission starts at 7.00 PM (CET) !!