Dear Haijin, visitors and travelers,
As you all (maybe) know I am writing our CDHK feuilleton "Wandering Spirit", about the life of Yozakura, the unknown haiku poet. Recently I started writing the new episode in which I describe Yozakura's first year as an apprentice of Basho. In that episode Basho and Yozakura start to create a chained verse, a renga. Yozakura has the honor to write the starting verse, or hokku.
birds sing their songs
Basho has to write the second verse (or waki) of two lines and he comes up with this:
cherry blossoms bloom again
shelter for young sparrows
Yozakura has to write the third verse (or daisan) of three lines, but he struggles with, because he has to use the "moon" or a reference to "moon" in it. Yozakura wishes to ask you all for your help with this. Can you help him with the 3rd verse (daisan)?
Share your third verse with him through the comment field. He will choose the third verse he likes the most and as it is your verse? Than he grants you the opportunity to be featured in a Wandering Spirit Special (something like our CDHK Special).
Of course I have given it a try too, so here is my third verse to help Yozakura:
makes the night mysterious
she ... the one I love
I hope you like this challenge and I am looking forward to your responses. You can respond through the comment field until October 25th 10:00 PM (CET). Have fun!
Shimmering night skyReplyDelete
Casting her spell on water
Ebbing and flowing.
then at sundownReplyDelete
as the song birds slumber
a hawk in moonbeams
Hello, here's mine: http://smellthecoffeeweb.blog/2017/10/19/wandering-spirit/ orReplyDelete
hues ebb and flow
under a lunar steady gaze
as night sounds awaken
__ I remember thinking (70 years ago) the night rain would fill the arch moon's cup; well, here below I tried. Smiles. _mReplyDelete
rain drips from its tip
misspelling: low mist. _mDelete
in a thousand moments
the spring moon
the moon in my sakeReplyDelete
oops -- please delete my previous submission! I changed one word in the poem. Please put this one up instead (thank you!):ReplyDelete
purple hanging light
sensei waits for me
A very nice challege, Kristjaan. Here is my daisan:ReplyDelete
cool veil of mist
covers her luminous face
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for soul connection
the pale moon hangs
still fresh against the sky
trailing morning glories
spring moon ask again
for a sakura .
my humble daisan
songs fade in moonlightReplyDelete
fall evening closes curtains
on sparrow's nest
Wow guys and girls what a joy to read all of your responses on Yozakura's question. Will not be easy to choose the right daisan.ReplyDelete