Dear Haijin, visitors and travelers,
Thank you all for your kind words, little by little I am feeling better, I have a kind of flu and that makes it impossible to take enough time to create the posts for CDHK.
Today however I have tried to create a nice episode for you inspired on Jane Reichhold's saijiki "A Dictionary of Haiku", today our prompt (modern kigo) is creek and it's a modern kigo from the Summer Terrestrial section.
Here are the haiku by Jane to inspire you:
summer creek
the fish in me getting
fish kisses
summer-hot hills
folding together
dry creek beds
without a boat
crossing the creek
pine shadow wind
© Jane Reichhold
Three wonderful, but extraordinary haiku, but ... well that was Jane, a great poetess with an extraordinary idea about haiku in our modern times.
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| Summer Creek |
the creek ripples
water circles grow
a pebble
© Chèvrefeuille
Not as strong as I had hoped, but I like the scene.
This episode is NOW OPEN for your submissions and will remain open until September 23rd at noon (CET). I will (try to) publish our new episode, wisdom, later on. For now ... have fun!
Makes me smile...every time you write your haiku is not too strong it is one of my favorite! I do like movement in haiku, and the way this one reads is really very nice indeed. I say reads but mean unfolds.
ReplyDeleteOh dear ... I didn't realize you've been ill! So very glad you're mending
ReplyDeleteAnd yes... your haiku unfolds beautifully
Carpe Diem Challenge #1057 Creek:
ReplyDeletegurgling brook
creatures of the forest
refreshed
Kristjaan,
ReplyDeleteA question if I may...
do you think you're haiku would sound more complete if it
said:
water circles grow
around a pebble
or do you feel that is too wordy?
No problem Joyce you can always question me, I love to "discuss" my own work. I have to say that I do understand your idea: with your idea this haiku will be like this:
Deletethe creek ripples
water circles grow
around a pebble
And that sounds great also, but the idea behind my sentence "a pebble" was to create a surprise or an "aha-erlebnis". I think that surprise that "aha-erlebnis" is gone as the third line would be as you propose "around a pebble".
Thank you, Kristjaan, I see your point...or pebble!!
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