Dear Haijin, visitors and travelers,
Thank you all for your kind words, little by little I am feeling better, I have a kind of flu and that makes it impossible to take enough time to create the posts for CDHK.
Today however I have tried to create a nice episode for you inspired on Jane Reichhold's saijiki "A Dictionary of Haiku", today our prompt (modern kigo) is creek and it's a modern kigo from the Summer Terrestrial section.
Here are the haiku by Jane to inspire you:
summer creek
the fish in me getting
fish kisses
summer-hot hills
folding together
dry creek beds
without a boat
crossing the creek
pine shadow wind
© Jane Reichhold
Three wonderful, but extraordinary haiku, but ... well that was Jane, a great poetess with an extraordinary idea about haiku in our modern times.
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| Summer Creek |
the creek ripples
water circles grow
a pebble
© Chèvrefeuille
Not as strong as I had hoped, but I like the scene.
This episode is NOW OPEN for your submissions and will remain open until September 23rd at noon (CET). I will (try to) publish our new episode, wisdom, later on. For now ... have fun!
Share your inspired haiku with us all here at our Haiku Kai.
| 1. | Kim M. Russell | 7. | SriSudha K | 13. | petra domina | |
| 2. | Rall | 8. | Elsie Hagley | 14. | lynn_ | |
| 3. | Nicole Pottier | 9. | Pat (Jazzytower) | 15. | Mis Lucja | |
| 4. | f o r e s t b a t h e r | 10. | VirginiaPopescu | 16. | tournesol | |
| 5. | Xenia Tran | 11. | B i r g i t t a | 17. | Sara McNulty | |
| 6. | Ken G. / rivrvlogr | 12. | Dolores |
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Makes me smile...every time you write your haiku is not too strong it is one of my favorite! I do like movement in haiku, and the way this one reads is really very nice indeed. I say reads but mean unfolds.
ReplyDeleteOh dear ... I didn't realize you've been ill! So very glad you're mending
ReplyDeleteAnd yes... your haiku unfolds beautifully
Carpe Diem Challenge #1057 Creek:
ReplyDeletegurgling brook
creatures of the forest
refreshed
Kristjaan,
ReplyDeleteA question if I may...
do you think you're haiku would sound more complete if it
said:
water circles grow
around a pebble
or do you feel that is too wordy?
No problem Joyce you can always question me, I love to "discuss" my own work. I have to say that I do understand your idea: with your idea this haiku will be like this:
Deletethe creek ripples
water circles grow
around a pebble
And that sounds great also, but the idea behind my sentence "a pebble" was to create a surprise or an "aha-erlebnis". I think that surprise that "aha-erlebnis" is gone as the third line would be as you propose "around a pebble".
Thank you, Kristjaan, I see your point...or pebble!!
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